Vicesteed Chapter 7
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abracanabra02/25/2009 - Wednesday
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penthius freewriting, "Birthday-Wishing Chimps."
* Made editing changes to Vicesteed, Chapter 7.
Deleted from Chapter 7
Old chapter wordcount: 4,959
New chapter wordcount: 3,641
Vicesteed Draft 1 wordcount: 207,877
Vicesteed Draft 2 current wordcount: 192,195
Which scene is it anyway?
Reason for deleting: Didn't really fit with the rest of the scene. Unfaithful husbands were never previously mentioned, either, so it was rather a non sequitor section.
Notes:
Huh. I guess I did pretty much maintain my cut ratio. I felt like I was leaving most of this in--there were a couple of sections where I cut a paragraph, and no longer sections. Most of it was a word here and a sentence there. I really like this chapter.
Or, should I say, I really like what used to be this chapter. This is what I did today: finished making editing changes to chapter 7, and then restructured everything I've edited from that POV so far. That's three chapters. I took the first half of the second chapter and merged it with the first chapter. Then I took the first half of the third chapter and merged it with that. Then I moved the second half of the second chapter and shoved it behind the second half of the third chapter. All in the name of getting "the good stuff" into the first three chapters, which is the usual sample amount an agent will want. I think it works better now--I really wanted to get the ragman into the beginning.
There is no longer a Chapter 7. There is a placeholder. Chapters 3 and 5 have been reworked, to--I hope--good result.
* Posted writing log.
*
penthius freewriting, "Birthday-Wishing Chimps."* Made editing changes to Vicesteed, Chapter 7.
Deleted from Chapter 7
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1,318 / 4,959 (26.6%) |
Old chapter wordcount: 4,959
New chapter wordcount: 3,641
Vicesteed Draft 1 wordcount: 207,877
Vicesteed Draft 2 current wordcount: 192,195
Which scene is it anyway?
He stopped keeping account of the contents of the piles. It was difficult, with the hands moving so fast, and he most sincerely doubted any of it had any hand in the cause of the prince's illness. He was tired. He wished for his lunch and his armchair. Although the housekeeper had promised him lunch, it would not be in his home, with his daughter sitting across the table. He could not have a leisurely cup of tea while considering the mating habits of the unfaithful husband.
He smiled. At least there was one advantage to this business.
Reason for deleting: Didn't really fit with the rest of the scene. Unfaithful husbands were never previously mentioned, either, so it was rather a non sequitor section.
Notes:
Huh. I guess I did pretty much maintain my cut ratio. I felt like I was leaving most of this in--there were a couple of sections where I cut a paragraph, and no longer sections. Most of it was a word here and a sentence there. I really like this chapter.
Or, should I say, I really like what used to be this chapter. This is what I did today: finished making editing changes to chapter 7, and then restructured everything I've edited from that POV so far. That's three chapters. I took the first half of the second chapter and merged it with the first chapter. Then I took the first half of the third chapter and merged it with that. Then I moved the second half of the second chapter and shoved it behind the second half of the third chapter. All in the name of getting "the good stuff" into the first three chapters, which is the usual sample amount an agent will want. I think it works better now--I really wanted to get the ragman into the beginning.
There is no longer a Chapter 7. There is a placeholder. Chapters 3 and 5 have been reworked, to--I hope--good result.